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I wonder what
Your first thought is
In the morning
When you wake up
Do you think about
A certain boy
Or the way you'll
Do your makeup

Or better yet
What's the last thing
That crosses your mind
When you're done
With your day
And you turn in
For the Night

You seem to be
All I can think about lately
I can't get you off my head
And it's driving me crazy
And I can't read you at all
You feel so far away
If I asked you to be with me
I wonder what you'd say

If I...
Close my eyes
and let the world
around me vanish
To make a wish
For you to be with me
Would it be childish
I can't think
Of a better wish
To deal with anguish
Lets get rid of this distance
that loves to punish
First of all..the tittle is mean to be similar to that funny movie "Not Another Teen Move.."
and second..I wrote this poem because I've had writer's block..and haven't been able to write
So I wanted to at least get something out there
Sorry if the poem isn't good T_T
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sunnySIDEofME Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student Photographer
Perfection.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, really now?
thank u

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sunnySIDEofME Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Student Photographer
Like u can see, I wasn't really on Da much, and now when I read all of them... I must said I'm impressed, u are getting better with every work u make Manny.
I'm proud! :aww:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha..
i dont know about that.
I just..Ive been writing here and there
but thanks.
did u really read all of them or just the newest ones?

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sunnySIDEofME Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Photographer
I think I did read all of them, but I might skip on some of the... But I don't think I did.
I had them all in my inbox
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh . Thank you then
I always like to hear your opinion
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sunnySIDEofME Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Photographer
You know it's my pleasure, always!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good ;P
lol
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luka567 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
What an amazing poem :O
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank u very much!
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luka567 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You're most welcome!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :)
I didn't think more established artists would like my poetry:)
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luka567 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Well, I do not consider myself an established artist, yet this piece of art really moved me, probably because I could personify with it immediately. Keep up the good work! =)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh, Well you seem to be an established artist.
I mean you Have amazing work..and like double the watchers I have...lol
But thanks..I try hard to have my work feel relatable..

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luka567 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hehe, well it's not all about the number of watchers, it's also about feedback etc.. It does feel nice to be 'watched' by many people, but that's not the main goal I believe. The point is to produce art, not always likeable to general public. That is how I see it. I love anything with a story. 

You're welcome, you are doing great as far as I am concerned! =)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are absolutely right about that.! :)
Thanks again!
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student Writer
I love this... I think all of us want someone to think of us this way.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha
Well thanks :)
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Student Writer
anytime
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Shadow-of-the-Wolves Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think it's very cute! :3
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
thank u

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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student Writer
It's sweet though ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks :)
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Student Writer
Welcome ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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scrubbing101 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It really is good...A lot of things you wrote, I thought about frequently before me and my boyfriend started to actually date.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really?
Thank u very much :)
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scrubbing101 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
<3 I quite enjoyed it
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks
though if u went through something like this..
maybe i have some hope too ;P

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scrubbing101 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's true :) Just don't give up. I had a crush on this guy since the day we first met. The first moment even. And then when the time came, we both went through break ups. And for 7 months I never gave up my feelings for him, and even though he liked other girls, he never got to date them, and then he recognized feelings for me, and now we have a perfect relationship.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like that :)
makes it seem like it was really meant to be :)
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scrubbing101 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:) Thats the way I see it heehee
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
Good luck :)
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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww! T_T This is so sad but oh so good! You might want to fix one part though...

"I can't get you off my head" I think you should change it to either "off my mind" or "out of my head". =3

You can ignore my suggestion if you want to, I just wanted to help, haha. ^_^

You're starting to make me think that you have an unrequited love. T_T 
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm on my phone
I might change it later.

Unrequited love huh.
Maybe ;P
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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah. Unrequited loves are so sad. T_T *sigh* Love is painful...
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love is indeed painful :/

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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*nods* T___T
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
are u in love? 
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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Secret. =w=
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:O
thats a yes
obviously
and..humph...
im going to guess its unrequited..
so...in love with someone...that isnt ur husband? :O
is it me? its me isnt it..
i knew it
sigh..lol
jk

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