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I'll confess...I'm not Strong
I breakdown every time I hear our song.
And I know that I was wrong
I couldn't prove to them that we Belong

Yeah..I'll confess
That I fucked up...I'm a Mess
There's no words  that could help me express
That this heart's filled with distress

But what can I do..If I no longer have you
Even if I beg to your god..the past isn't something that I can Undo
And I wish, from the start...that I knew
That I was a sky....that was loosing its blue

Who would have known that I'd be so empty.
that there was so many things that could easily tempt me
think back to what was wrong with us..I'm sure you'll think of Plenty
I don't believe in god...but I know you're the last angel that he'll send me
Lovie
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Genisay Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It sounds like song lyrics. I was tempted to try and sing it, but I'm not very good at dreaming up tunes for things.

If you were to put a music style to it, what kind would you pick?
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh, you did it anyway....lol
Thank you..!

Haha, I dont think Im very good at making songs.

but If I did it would be a rock song of course.
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Genisay Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hmmm.......*thinks* Rock is one of the genres I know the best! I grew up pretty much on Rock, Country, and Pop, but I also love Techno, Trance, Alternative, Fantasy Metal, Power Metal and Classical, with some Rap (there are a few unique rappers out there that I respect...far too many all sound the same though).  Haha, it's probably easier for me to figure out what music I don't like then to list all of the ones I do.  I just like music as long as it's got a good beat, tells a story, makes you feel something deep down inside.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I see. The music that I am into is post-hardcore and metalcore rock. Its more commonly referred to as screamo.
I do listen to other types of rock of course, I love classic rock so my music ranges from Queen to Guns N Roses to Metallica To Korn and Falling in Reverse To UnderOath.
There is so much in rock that is great

So when you ask about this poem and what kind of music it would go to...its kind of hard to say
Maybe a combination  of my favorites.
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Darkpoet123 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Damn, your last angel was a lucky one :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank u very much..
though i dont know whats so lucky about feeling pain..lol
regardless....thank u for the favorite and the watch 
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Darkpoet123 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nooo, I meant that she was lucky enough to have you :)
and no prob, thanks for the watch back ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Im not sure, that would be considered lucky...lol
u are very welcome :)
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Darkpoet123 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
XD and thanks :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i really appreciate u liking my witing
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Darkpoet123 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's very good, blows away my shitty poems XD
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
dont say that..
Im honored u like my poetry...but there is no "better"
jut different ways of expressing ourselves
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is so beautiful, i know how that feels. very well written :clap:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much :)
And Im sorry that u know how it feels :/ 
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :huggle:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Another F bomb.....but this one fits.
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know v.v

This one.........is probably one of my favorites....
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really?
Good
I like it too
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lionesspride99 Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love this!!! well done! :D
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much c:
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lionesspride99 Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome!!! :D
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it means a lot :)
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lionesspride99 Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah, so i can see
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
what do u mean by that
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lionesspride99 Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i can see the poem ment a lot to you
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol
i meant...that it means a lot..that u liked my poem
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songbird0705 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe i really like this poem :3
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really?
whats ur favorite part?
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songbird0705 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
all of it :3 it kinda reminds me of a situation i went throught but i wasn't the person feeling it, my friend was lmfao :3
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
i see..
poor friend then.
its the worst feeling ;P
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songbird0705 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it is <3 but the friend is no longer a "last angel" he's "my angel" <3
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol
"Last Angel" doesnt refer to it being the previous one.
just...the One.
The Last that will ever cross ur path.
just that in my case...I lost that Angel.
so Im a little jealous of u right now ;P
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songbird0705 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awww i sorry u.u
But heyyy don't be jelly!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
its hard not to be
nah..but its fine.
maybe what i need now is a little devil ;P
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angelichope Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
I thought it was nice, and sorry with whatever love you lost.
I really like the line "I don't believe in god...but I know you're the last angel that he'll send me"
I think it's all lovely!:)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much.
Yes everyone seems to like that line lol
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angelichope Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
And it's easy to see why!!:)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well every now and then I have what I.like to call
Perfect lines ;P
Though they're not perfect.
But...gives people the ending they want
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angelichope Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
I think they are perfect, and that everyone has their perfect lines in their heads!:)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha.
Well thank you.
Though not every one writes... So I'm not sure everyone has perfect lines lol
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angelichope Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
Welcome!:)
Oh, Haha, yeah you have a point!!
Guess I should rephrase that!:giggle:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha
I guess you should ;P
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Writer
I really love this. It is amazing. Keep up the good work.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much!
I will try
xD
though my poems have seem to be on a slump
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Writer
That's okay. Sometimes I don't write for weeks because there is nothing that comes to mind. So if you have not posted in a while I am sure that it will be fine.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
no..i mean.i have posted
its just that
the quality..has been dropping
and..
idk
i feel like they just arent as good.
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Writer
Well the one's that you have posted that I looked at were great. Sometimes my poems go down hill, and then other times they are good. I guess it just depends on how you feel the day you write them.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
I guess so
Maybe people are too tired of having the same concepts from me xD
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