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I remember when I first saw you
Sitting by the ocean's bay
There was no words that could describe you
"Perfect" was all I thought to say

But you were so much more than just "perfect"
It was like you were cut right out of my dreams
A rollercoaster of emotions
My heartbeat started turning into screams

I can't believe you used to make me feel so happy
So much that everyday felt like my heart was having an attack
I can't believe a heart can beat so much
I wish that I could have those moments back

Everything was going great
But chasing dreams was really tough
It was so hard to stay on course
Who would of thought that love just wasn't enough

And I've been trying to move on
Ever since I lost you
But the problem is that I love you still
I've got no hope..
Because I always will

So I don't think
That I'll ever love again
I'd just get hurt
And It's way too much pain
I've got nothing more to gain
there's no other girl
Who'll make me feel the same
Who can make me shiver
With the way she says my name

I can't have you back..
I know..
So that means that
Love has to completely go
Because all my love has gone with you
My heart has gone infertile and no more love will ever grow

I'll never love again
My heart will only be for you
Even if I no longer hold the key to yours
And you're already loving someone new
I know deep down you're still the same
Silly girl that I once knew
That's why I just can't love again
Because the girl I love
Still lives inside of you
Newest poem
Not that great..i know.
this type of poem isn't my forte

anyway...hope u guys still like it.
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CanUSpellMyName Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I liiiiiiiiiike it

.............................still though.......another one that reminds me of back in the day.
IINegativeII Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this one was one of the cheesier ones of mine,

all of them will remind u of back then

CanUSpellMyName Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Did you write any of them with "back then" in mind?
IINegativeII Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well my poetry is based on my life..
soo u can assume what u must 
CanUSpellMyName Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can assume some other girl came along.....or that it's about Laura.....

Or I can go back to assuming....more like knowing...I'ma terrible person. Which I am anyways, so might as well accept it.
IINegativeII Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh assuming does have a lot of routes huh
Who knows.
kind of takes the magic away if I reveal the trick 

CanUSpellMyName Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

or makes me feel bad. Which I'm sure you're loving.
IINegativeII Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I dont want u to feel bad
dont think that 
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I like your stuff a lot. The only thing that I might offer is that when you're writing try to put your stanzas in a pattern. Pick a pattern whether it is four lines or six or whatever and try to fit the words into that pattern. It's can be a pain in the ass at times but, to me anyways, it has a more fluid pace and makes it easier to read.  I'm not a professional in anyway so take my words for what they're worth. Also don't down play your stuff. If you like it and it moves you than that's all that really matters.
IINegativeII Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot :)
Yes, I know that i should stick to a certain structure..but when i write..i usually..just forget all that...and just write what comes to mind
However..Im trying to be better at that
Thanks again for the advise :)

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