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I remember when I first saw you
Sitting by the ocean's bay
There was no words that could describe you
"Perfect" was all I thought to say

But you were so much more than just "perfect"
It was like you were cut right out of my dreams
A rollercoaster of emotions
My heartbeat started turning into screams

I can't believe you used to make me feel so happy
So much that everyday felt like my heart was having an attack
I can't believe a heart can beat so much
I wish that I could have those moments back

Everything was going great
But chasing dreams was really tough
It was so hard to stay on course
Who would of thought that love just wasn't enough

And I've been trying to move on
Ever since I lost you
But the problem is that I love you still
I've got no hope..
Because I always will

So I don't think
That I'll ever love again
I'd just get hurt
And It's way too much pain
I've got nothing more to gain
there's no other girl
Who'll make me feel the same
Who can make me shiver
With the way she says my name

I can't have you back..
I know..
So that means that
Love has to completely go
Because all my love has gone with you
My heart has gone infertile and no more love will ever grow

I'll never love again
My heart will only be for you
Even if I no longer hold the key to yours
And you're already loving someone new
I know deep down you're still the same
Silly girl that I once knew
That's why I just can't love again
Because the girl I love
Still lives inside of you
Newest poem
Not that great..i know.
this type of poem isn't my forte

anyway...hope u guys still like it.
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I liiiiiiiiiike it


.............................still though.......another one that reminds me of back in the day.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha 
thanks
this one was one of the cheesier ones of mine,

all of them will remind u of back then

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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Did you write any of them with "back then" in mind?
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well my poetry is based on my life..
soo u can assume what u must 
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can assume some other girl came along.....or that it's about Laura.....



Or I can go back to assuming....more like knowing...I'ma terrible person. Which I am anyways, so might as well accept it.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh assuming does have a lot of routes huh
humph
Who knows.
kind of takes the magic away if I reveal the trick 

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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Kinda.......



or makes me feel bad. Which I'm sure you're loving.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I dont want u to feel bad
dont think that 
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stilt61 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
I like your stuff a lot. The only thing that I might offer is that when you're writing try to put your stanzas in a pattern. Pick a pattern whether it is four lines or six or whatever and try to fit the words into that pattern. It's can be a pain in the ass at times but, to me anyways, it has a more fluid pace and makes it easier to read.  I'm not a professional in anyway so take my words for what they're worth. Also don't down play your stuff. If you like it and it moves you than that's all that really matters.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot :)
Yes, I know that i should stick to a certain structure..but when i write..i usually..just forget all that...and just write what comes to mind
However..Im trying to be better at that
Thanks again for the advise :)

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stilt61 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Definitely stick with the words. They are the most important and everything else comes in seconds. You're words are good.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot :)
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BOFfan13 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
D: ............. </3....... so........... sad.......................................................................................... BUT GOOD :3.
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Student Writer
i love this as always your poems are briliant!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant? lol
are u british now? ;P
thank u very much
it means a lot.
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Student Writer
lol it's just a word i like to say. my very favourtie word is swicked I made it up.
your welcome. just stating the truth.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha
But British people say Brilliant xD
Swickled.....lol..ok then
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Student Writer
haha that's funny! it sounds like pickles
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
and how is it used?
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Student Writer
how is what used?
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ur made up word.
how do u use it.

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MySocksRock Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
i can relate to this for sure
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im sorry to hear that :/
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MySocksRock Featured By Owner May 20, 2013
*sigh*

I'm sorry to say it.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Life gets better :/
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JB5112 Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
Wow.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
is that a good or a bad wow?
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JB5112 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
GREAT
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks a lot :)
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iKestrel Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist
Describes some relationships I know perfectly. well done.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks :)
describes mine a little as well ;P
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iKestrel Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist
=D
Ahaaa
It's always easier to write from experience
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah..i guess thats true :)
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iKestrel Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist
:)
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
So depressing. But nice rhyming.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I try :)
thank u very much
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SobDontCry Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i really like this one pepe. something about it just.. i dont know.. anyway amazing as always senior ^^!!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
thanks freshman :)
im glad u like it
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SobDontCry Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
of course ^^ and your welcome senior c:!!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
means a lot :3
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SobDontCry Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Senior, your art and poems will always be amazing ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ok ok stop kissing ass..i'll still love u ;P
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SobDontCry Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
pffft me kissing ass? seriously? im being honest. i am hurt you'd say that :tears: haha nah but really i am being honest c:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
fine..fine
i love u too :3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Student Writer
I like it =D
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im glad u do!!
:D
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Tsukiko1516 Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
amazing as usual old friend ^-^ <3
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well thank u very much
glad u like it
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ckittykatty Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
;u;
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
what?
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