The Devil Speaks in Whispers
talking straight into my ear
In the distance Angels screaming
but their words I just can't hear
And I wish that I could make out
At least one word that they say
But it seems that once again
the Devil will have his way
Clouds wont seem to leave me
I'm always followed by the rain
my shadow seems to stalk me
And keeps whispering my name
Trying not to lose my senses
I keep myself in check
But I can feel a breath
Sliding through my neck
If I say my prayers
And just be honest with myself
will It save my soul
Or protect me from this hell
I'm starting to lose control
I can feel it everyday
Something's taking over me
The Devil will have his way
The sunlight won't come near me
Darkness takes its toll on my brain
It seems I lost my senses
All I can feel now is Pain
I know I'm insignificant
I know I'm just a Speck
Will never amount to anything
I'll always be a wreck
But I've said my prayers
And I couldn't save myself
I condemned my soul
I'm stuck here in this hell
I don't know who's in control
I've lost myself for days
He finally took over me
The Devil had his way
I love it
omg *-* this art <3
Ooh. Dark and kinda creepy. I like it. Haha. >=3
Im really proud of this one
Hm......I like this one.....the beginning was AMAZING kinda........felt.......repetitive in the middle compared to your other poems but overall I like it
Thank u very much
I put the most thought into the beginning :3
Im kinda proud of it..lol
The beginning is wonderful.......you can FEEL the evilness haha ^^
I am TOTALLY in love with this. Really, really nice. I can't wait to read some of your other pieces.
I have a question....is it ok to post more than one poem at a time?
I usually write once a week...and well....right now i have two pieces and
i dont know if i should wait a week to post.
Just dont want people to be bored..or overwhelmed..or just not want me to post so much
what do u think?
post both of them..
Or one at a time?
Hmm...I would suggest that you wait a little bit between each posting. Two poems a week is totally fine, but make sure that you leave a couple of days in between so that you give people a chance to comment and stuff.
Kept my attention through the entire thing. Good work )
wow this is pretty good. I can imagine all this happening pretty vividly. and I liked your use of words yo. ^^
Good use of rhyme and imagery. Good job.
i love your writing, its so awesome xD
Nice use of imagery to convey a rather grim story ^^
I particularly like this one~ it's dark, yet in a sense it's kinda moving