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The Devil Speaks in Whispers
talking straight into my ear
In the distance Angels screaming
but their words I just can't hear
And I wish that I could make out
At least one word that they say
But it seems that once again
the Devil will have his way

Clouds wont seem to leave me
I'm always followed by the rain
my shadow seems to stalk me
And keeps whispering my name

Trying not to lose my senses
I keep myself in check
But I can feel a breath
Sliding through my neck

If I say my prayers
And just be honest with myself
will It save my soul
Or protect me from this hell
I'm starting to lose control
I can feel it everyday
Something's taking over me
The Devil will have his way

The sunlight won't come near me
Darkness takes its toll on my brain
It seems I lost my senses
All I can feel now is Pain

I know I'm insignificant
I know I'm just a Speck
Will never amount to anything
I'll always be a wreck

But I've said my prayers
And I couldn't save myself
I condemned my soul
I'm stuck here in this hell
I don't know who's in control
I've lost myself for days
He finally took over me
The Devil had his way
Newest poem
Was kinda...experimental
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2014  Student Writer
I love it
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
It's one of my favorites
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome :D
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NightFoxTsukiko Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Student Artist
omg *-* this art <3 
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks
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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh. Dark and kinda creepy. I like it. Haha. >=3
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha
Thank u
Im really proud of this one ;P

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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha. You should be, it's very good. ^_^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks
The reason for writing this poem isn't something to be proud about ;P

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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
...No...? O_o *is confused*
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
hahah
I'll tell u the secret some day xD

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LongingForFlame Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha okay XD
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
But only if you tell me one too ;P
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hm......I like this one.....the beginning was AMAZING kinda........felt.......repetitive in the middle compared to your other poems but overall I like it :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much
I put the most thought into the beginning :3
Im kinda proud of it..lol


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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The beginning is wonderful.......you can FEEL the evilness haha ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know..right
I actually wrote this..because of a manga xD
because Im so nerdy like that.

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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconstudmuffinplz:

You ARE. A nerd.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know T_T

But hey..it helped me pull this off right?!
:D 
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
pshhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.

BARELY.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh ouch
thanks >_>

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Jezmine-Guardia Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
I am TOTALLY in love with this. Really, really nice. I can't wait to read some of your other pieces.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much :3
I hope u enjoy them all ;P
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Jezmine-Guardia Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Student Writer
^_^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I have a question....is it ok to post more than one poem at a time?
I usually write once a week...and well....right now i have two pieces and
i dont know if i should wait a week to post.
Just dont want people to be bored..or overwhelmed..or just not want me to post so much
what do u think?
post both of them..
Or one at a time?

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Jezmine-Guardia Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Student Writer
Hmm...I would suggest that you wait a little bit between each posting. Two poems a week is totally fine, but make sure that you leave a couple of days in between so that you give people a chance to comment and stuff.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah I added the first one...
i'll add the second one next time...
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Jezmine-Guardia Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Student Writer
Awesome, sounds like a plan. ^_^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the help :)

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DelightDreamer Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kept my attention through the entire thing. Good work )Clap 
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot :)
that means more than u know ;P

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DelightDreamer Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yay!! :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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xXFireNIceComicsXx Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
wow this is pretty good. I can imagine all this happening pretty vividly. and I liked your use of words yo. ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks a lot. :)

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xXFireNIceComicsXx Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
:peace: No problem yo =D :peace:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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SoldiersWolf Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good use of rhyme and imagery. Good job.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :3
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TheGoatstealer Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love your writing, its so awesome xD
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :)
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Student Writer
Nice use of imagery to convey a rather grim story ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much :)
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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monochromera Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
I particularly like this one~ it's dark, yet in a sense it's kinda moving
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha
Well thank u very much :)
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