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Please don't leave me alone
But don't stand by too close
I'm scared of the silence
I'm being haunted by ghosts
The past lives in my head
Displaying where my problems arose
Walking down the same road as my father
Is what I'm scared of the most

Never had someone to guide me
Someone who'd show me the path
The only lessons I've had
Showed me to be controlled by my wrath
Little by little
Its been eating at my heart
But who needs to feel
When I'm only embraced by the dark

I need to rub alcohol on all my wounds
So I'll press this bottle to my lips
Every shot is medication
That helps my thoughts become eclipsed
I'll use my pills
To turn my brain a dark abyss
Maybe all I need as medication
Is for Death to come and drop a kiss

Can you fight off these demons
Can you heal my heart
Prove my life is still worth living
Before I fall apart
I don't have much time
Please save me from the dark
To anyone who hears me
Please come and heal my Heart

I'm scared of this life
I'm scared of the pain
These shot's help to numb things
But it hurts all the same
I can't do this alone
I'm going insane, destrying my brain
Can someone still heal my heart
Before I can no longer be Sane
Its been a while since my last poem.
It keeps getting harder and harder to get new ideas..lol
sorry if this one feels forced
enjoy
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anticodac Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful emotional words.  I don't think it seems forced. Rather if it does, the 'force' of it seems to help with the tone, but that might just be me.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much.
It was a little forced as I couldn't think of words and made myself write.
But I'm glad you thinksit's good.
Thanks again for taking the time to check out my gallery. .. it means a lot.
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anticodac Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D 

I haven't really checked all of it, but I plan to ! 
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks T_T
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DragonEyeInfinity Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
So powerful poem of yours.. I :love: it! XD
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much :)
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DragonEyeInfinity Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
My pleasure. You're welcome! ^_^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:icondragonhugplz:
we have too many conversations going on..lol
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DragonEyeInfinity Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I know right..! :D

Thanks for all the reply anyways. ^_^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
maybe we should get rid of a few
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DragonEyeInfinity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
ahhmm, which one do you like to rid off? XD ..the decisions are yours.. :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I could never decide Iol
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PhoenixOfWinterfell Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Student Writer
That's beautiful... A little sad, but that's what really makes the poem beautiful... Good Work! :D
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much :)
I am glad u liked it
It means so much
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PhoenixOfWinterfell Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Student Writer
:D It was no problem~ And I loved it! ^w^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks :)
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UselessItalian Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's lovely.
Sad, though, all the same. You know how it is. ^^
But good job. I really like it.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much :)
I'm glad u like it!
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UselessItalian Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course. ^^
I did. Wish I could write something as great as this.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
U are just too nice :)
thanks it means a lot
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UselessItalian Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:3
Of course, of course. It wasn't any problem. ^^
Keep on doin' what you're doin'.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol being a depressing person? xD
sure why not..lol
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UselessItalian Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, no! XD
Not that! Not that.
Your poems. Is beautiful.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha..
thanks.
though most people would call them depressing
people like them though.
i find..people really like emotional things
and me being an emotional wreck...can provide it for them
thanks for another favorite :)
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Writer
The last part, where you rhymed 'brain' and 'insane' is a bit forced, but the emotion behind the words is very clearly there.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Does it feel forced?
Well i guess that might be why i dont like the end too much ;P
I havent written in so long.
people used to love the way i ended poems..lol
maybe i lost my touch.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Student Writer
It's writing, one never loses their touch! You're just getting back into the feel of the words =)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
I changed the last stanza....
but it still doesnt sound right.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Student Writer
You'll get there =)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
meh...at least people still like it.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Student Writer
:nod:
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jtcheney Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The line "I'm destroying my brain" is a little off, doesn't match pentameter. One simple change would be "alone inside my brain".
I do like the poem, it has a lot of significance to me, as I feel the same. Isolated, trapped, loveless, and alone. I couldn't say my rhymes are any better, but you may find comfort in some of my work.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i changed it a little.
might not be the best change though..
but oh well..
thanks for the favorite.
it means a lot :)
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jtcheney Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you hate your father, are so torn up looking for love, and write such good poetry. I think we have quite a few things in common, yo. I hope you find what you are looking for.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Can u really tell all of this from just my poetry? lol
Thanks...it means a lot
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jtcheney Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's like a shortcut into your soul, dude.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha..
i guess so.
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jtcheney Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
come to think of it, my suggestion may be no better....
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Write-Then-Think Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Congrats on making me even more depressed on attempting to score someone I really like..
But very well spoken and I could feel your desperation or cry..
Keep writing!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
what do you mean?
who were you trying to score?
I don't see how that applies to this poem
and thanks.
glad you like it
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Write-Then-Think Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Writer
I don't even know...
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OK..THEN?
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Write-Then-Think Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Writer
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like this the flow and emotion still have great imagery for my head. The only thing that I think is forced, maybe you could have stopped after anyone can hear me please come and heal my heart. I still like it though. Good job
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks.
this was actually inspired by a song..
so that last part.. is kinda.. how in the song.. it repeats that over and over
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