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Hello my son
I wonder how you have been
Not many news come from outside
In this cell that I'm in

But I'm hoping
That you have been fine
Can't recall since I last saw you
It's impossible to keep track of time

Despite all that I've sent you
There's been no reply to my letters
Are you ashamed of your father?
Is it because I'm chained by these fetters?

I miss you, son
I miss your sisters and your brother
I've been missing all the little things
Like waking up each morning to the smile of your mother

The news did reach me, though
That you're about to have a daughter
I hope you've grown as a better man than me
Its the only wish I have as your father

Do what I couldn't
And take care of your family
Be a better man than me
And do everything I knew that you could be

Son, I'm not sure if you still read my letters
Or If they're just thrown away
But in the chance that you're still reading
There is something that I just need to say

My time has already come
That I must tell you goodbye
I want to ask your forgiveness
Before Its my time to die

So if you can forgive me
Please reply to this letter
Even if I have to meet my maker
This will make everything better
New poem
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
._. I love it. 

From the p.o.v of your dad, yeah?
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yup.

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SobDontCry Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Like I said senior, amazing.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks freshman...
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Ninefiftin Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This one is really good.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks.
Im glad u like it :)
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Ninefiftin Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome ^^
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's been a while
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have no words expect wow. I really like this one.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :)
the original idea for this..was actually quite different..to how it turned out.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
This is a really good one =)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im glad u like it :)
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
My pleasure =D
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TheDarkAngelxX Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013   Traditional Artist
Ooh....really like this one.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks..glad u like it.
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TheDarkAngelxX Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Traditional Artist
Yup
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II-Invisible-II Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
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I LOVE IT!
Hehehe
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I'm sorry
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I like ellipsis dots!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks.
and yes i can tell.
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II-Invisible-II Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013
:P
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WhatIsBeauty1 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is one of your better ones.
I love the rhyme scheme in this too.
Great job. (:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :)
Idk about being one of my better ones..I mean i have others that could probably blow this out of the water..
but..this one..is kinda close to home.
so maybe i was able to express the emotions better than in other cases.
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WhatIsBeauty1 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can relate to this one a lot too so maybe that's why I like it a bit more than others, but who knows?
In any case, this really is a beautiful poem. You have talent. (:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww well thank u very much :)
though most critiques find my work very boring xD
lol
and...that i need technique..and all that
so really..im not very talented.
but thanks for thinking so anyway
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