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We stumbled on to something
without trying to seek it
But now that we have it
We're trying to keep it a secret

So when everyone's around
We try so hard not to make a sound
Our heads are lowered
We keep looking forward
To not look into each other's eyes

We try to act like strangers
To keep ourselves from dangers
Try not to grab attention
Don't need anyone to mention
That this facade is full of lies

Don't want to be a topic
People would like to discuss
No need for conversations
People talking about us

Holding this emotion back
Until it overflows and pours
You and I will always be
A love that exists only behind closed doors
Newest poem
Sorry if it doesnt live up to the expectations of everyone..since my last poem...was so successful.
its hard to write something...that i think people would also enjoy
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Secrets don't make it fun.

It makes it hard when it becomes reality and public and it's a mess -.-;
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha
it mkes it fun
there is a type of excitement..of keeping it hidden 

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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
If you -can- keep it hidden.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can
Im a secretive person 
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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Eh. Hardly.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
u dont think Im secretive?

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CanUSpellMyName Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
nahhhhhhhh not really.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Why not?
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TheLionAndTheFish Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Very interesting, a love that's supposed to be secret...

But Manny, you shouldn't worry too much; of course, not every poem is a masterpiece, but I think you're an amazing poet and you shouldn't worry whether or not your work live up to expectations.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha
Secret makes it all that more interesting ;P
and fun...lol

And Yes i know :/
But..After having a poem that did so well...I felt like i poured too much into it..that i lost all creativity for words..
and i had to sort of force this poem out.
But then..i feel like i got more inspiration by the next poem. "Yesterday" :)
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SoldiersWolf Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovin the rhymes.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :)
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Ninefiftin Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a very good piece :nod: :heart:
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u very much
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Ninefiftin Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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II-Invisible-II Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
So what if it doesn't live up to everyone else's expectations! It should live up to your expectations! Write what you want, who gives an f- what everyone else thinks!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah yeah
I guess
it doesnt really matter
its not like anyone has left me anything bad
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student Writer
I don't think that it should matter that much what others think of your writing... It just matters what you think of it.

I rather like this one though, it can apply to a lot of different situations =)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh well I always hate my writing ;P
lol

anyway
thanks for liking it
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Student Writer
XD Most do. It's the reason why they get better =D

Welcome.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha
why havent i gotten better yet then? xD
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student Writer
Because you don't even notice it ;p
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
that means my improvements arent big enough to notice..so i still suck :c
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
No, it means you're used to the level, not that they're not big enough. You created them, you wouldn't really notice in the first place.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Meh.
Idk...i think my poems could be better.
I just dont know how to create them better. lol
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TheGoatstealer Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
its amazing
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nah..not really but thanks :)
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TheGoatstealer Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes really :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
U are too nice.
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