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Dear God

I'm looking at the sky....and I wonder if you're there
I'm tired..lost..completely broken...and I wonder if you care
I'll admit....I've always doubted if you're real
But I'm here praying to the heavens....you can take away the pain I feel

But..its not just me..I see suffering everywhere
People who just dream of dying..who wish that you'd be there
And these people are so nice...they're like Angels from the earth
But everyday they hurt so much..they wish their parents had never given birth

See God, that I just can't understand
Where are you when all these people need a helping hand
Everywhere.I see..just the good people getting hurt
Everyday asking for a grave...for their hearts are already buried in the dirt

And the people filled with greed....why do they succeed
When all these angels hurt themselves...watching themselves bleed
I'll be here....everyday.. praying to you, God
Hoping that you'll help the angels...from being buried in the sod

And even though I'm not an angel..I hope you can help me too
I know I don't deserve it....for always doubting you
But If you're really all forgiving...then please take the pain away
Because God I'm here now doubting....If I'll get to see another day
As many people may..or may not know...I'm an Atheist..
but..today..I was talking to someone...who...is really..just an Angel...and i can't stand how much she has gone through.
It helped inspire this poem
sorry....If it...offends anyone.
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Kenzie-Segal Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
ur sooo sweet :) thank u sooo much and yes it made me cry :heart: I'm happy i was the inspiration
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It made u cry D:
that doesnt...really..make me feel good about it >_>
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Kenzie-Segal Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
in a good way geez :)
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well.Im glad u like it :)
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ckittykatty Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
cute! im not anything, considering im planning on studying religions (non-bais) and i already know a bunch. this was pretty, and im sure my gma would LOVE it.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ermm
thanks :)
I Hope she does love it.
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ckittykatty Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha, i didnt show her it
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh
then nvm XD lol
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ckittykatty Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah..lol
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ckittykatty Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
man, right now just sucks
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
whats wrong.?
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sunnySIDEofME Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Photographer
I'm a Christian, and I often feel lost is faith.
I love this one, it's my top fav from you.
It's different than usual and the words and emotions flow while I read this.
It's...perfect.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh?
This is ur top favorite from me now?
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sunnySIDEofME Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Photographer
One of my favs, because I cane relate to it!!!
Idk I see myself in it!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks...
This poem...kinda...idk
i thought of it..came up with most of it in my head.
then..just wrote it.
so...the rhymes arent too complicated.
and....its not really arranged..the best.
but...
glad u like it.
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sunnySIDEofME Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student Photographer
And maybe cuz of that arrangements and stuff it's so good.
Well it's special for me, and I'm glad you posted it!
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks..
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ModestMarissaMumbles Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student General Artist
I really like this one, Manuel.
You did a wonderful job.
I hope she will inspire you to seek God more.
I've been told, as a Christian, that earth is the worst we will ever have it. And those who don't believe, earth is the best they'll ever have.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank u.
And...Im not entirely sure she believes in God.
I was... just.. inspired with this..because of some things she said
Its hard to explain >_>
but...no
no one can make me believe in god...sorry.
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ModestMarissaMumbles Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student General Artist
Well its your choice..
just don't blame those who tried in the end.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I dont blame anyone.
U are not meant to pressure me..into changing beliefs
e've been through this.
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ModestMarissaMumbles Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student General Artist
I wasn't trying to pressure you. Im just saying to consider it. C. S. Lewis used to be an atheist.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ive been religious.
i grew out of it.
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ModestMarissaMumbles Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Student General Artist
its not being religious though. Its a relationship with God. But oh don't listen to me because im pressuring you.
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
>_>
yeah
i understand.
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CuddleSlut17 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... that was different sad yet true good people getting hurt. While I belive in God. And my religion is different I like this piece
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IINegativeII Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks...I'm glad u like it.
Yeah...I can write about more than just heartbreak...lol
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